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A Song For My Lover - Part 1 of 2

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   Annie Kenyon stared out the window, watching the rain fall in undulating sheets onto the Berkeley campus. She was cloistered safely in her dorm room, perched on the edge of her long, narrow bed. Her feet swung gently to and fro, toes whispering across the carpet. Her charcoal gaze idly traced the rain, and she began humming a slow, lazy melody that followed each waving band. This was so like the day she had met Liza.

Liza.

Just thinking the name made Annie snap out of her trance. She ceased her absentminded humming and flopped back on her bed, a soft sigh passing her lips. “It’s been so long since I’ve heard from you, Liza,” Annie murmured aloud, mentally projecting an image of her love onto the white stucco ceiling. “It’s funny, but what I want the most right now is to sing for you. I want to sing songs of love and hope and happiness to you, because I know that everything that happened with Ms. Stevenson and Ms. Widmer hit you really hard. It hit me hard too. But it never changed the way I feel about you, never made me question our love. Has it done that for you? Is that why you haven’t responded to any of my letters? Are you… Are you ashamed of me, Liza? Of our love? …Do you love me anymore?”

A lump rose in Annie’s throat, and she turned onto her side, curling up into a ball as quiet sobs began to rattle her shoulders. “I don’t know the answers to any of those questions, Liza,” she thought, feeling hot, salty tears snake across her face. “I don’t know if I’ll ever get the chance to sing for you again.”
"Annie On My Mind" by Nancy Garden is absolutely my favourite book of all time. It helped me when I was alone and in the closet in high school, and continues to be a friend to me. I thought it was high time to say thank you, so I wrote this little blurb. Don't worry, there WILL be a second part, and I promise it will be much less depressing. Anyone who knows me can attest that I all but vomit rainbows and fart butterflies; as if could leave you with a sad ending. ^_^
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As sad as this is, I really do like it.

First off, this is really good prose. It flows naturally, describes the situation properly, and really offers a look into the heroine's mind. In just a few short paragraphs, you paint the portrait of a girl who is afraid her love will go unrequited, terrified that the one she cares of most of all no longer cares for her. Instantly, I get to wondering - who is Liza? Who is Annie, really? Why isn't Liza answering any letters? Who are Ms. Stevenson and Ms. Widmer, and what role do they play? The last paragraph offers a moment of emotional intensity. Loss, loneliness, confusion, fear, uncertainty, helplessness, all flooding over her at once, overwhelmingly. I can't say I've been in her particular situation, but I can say that there've been times I've been plagued by similar feelings. In just a few short paragraphs, you've gotten me emotionally invested, and interested in the characters and the story. Awesome.

This is amazing on its own, but I really look forward to the rainbowfull and butterfly-rific revelations of part 2 of 2!